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高考判卷感受今年我很荣幸的参加了北京市外语高考判卷工作,受老师委托,通过今天这样一个机会把判卷的感受和大家交流沟通一下,总的来说,判卷的标准还是比较严格的,一共200名老师进行判卷,其中有一半是大学老师,这也就意味着对学生作答的要求更加严格,试卷实行双评制两位教师的评分如果超过3分要进行三评.通过这次亲临高考阅卷工作真正体会了高考的严肃和神圣.近几年的北京高考情景作文以图画式为主;一般由四幅画组成的组图,同时给出一定的文字说明题材主要涉及到学生熟悉或经历的日常生活考查学生对图画内容的观察和理解,要求学生有条理,有重点,生动准确地把图画内容加工成书面语言拿今年作文举例,今年我判的最高的作文是20分,最低的作文是0分,下面我们大家一起来看一下今年的作文同样也是四幅图,我想和大家一起解读一下情景作文的评分细则本人认为对高考英语写作非常有意义.本题总分20分,按五个档次给分评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分评分应考虑内容要点的完整性,上下文的连贯性,词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性拼写,标点符号或书写影响内容表达时,应视其影响程度予以考虑,英美拼写及词汇用法均可接受词数少有60,从总分中减去1分二.内容要点
1.发现
2.询问
3.告诉路线
4.分别WiththesunrisingwithagentlebreezeIwasjoggingalongthestreetwhenIsawaforeigncoupletalkingwithacitymap.puzzleworeobviouslyontheirfaceitdawnedonmethattheymusthavebeenlost.ThemomentItalkedtothemIgottorealizethattheycouldnotlocatetheplaceoftiantan.tellingthemhowtodiscovertherightspottheywereheadingforIalsoshowedthemhowtosteptowardthetempleofheaven.duetomyintroductiontheybegantofeltasignofrelief.WithasunrisingthegentlebreezeIwaswalkingalongthestreetwhenISawtwoforeignersstandingonthestreet.Howtimeflies!itwassoonthatthebuspulledatthebusstop.itwasobviousthattheyweregoingtoleave.beforeleavingIsawthemoffwavinghandtothemexpressingmybesthopetothem.ShortthoughthedeedwasIfeltproudanddelightedfornotonlycanIofferthehelpinghandtotheneedypeoplebutIhaveshowedhowpoliteandenthusiasticourBeijingpeopleare.他们的表情很迷惑的样子,我想到他们肯定迷路了于是我走上前去,问他们的问题是什么他们说不知道天坛在地图上标的那里,知道了这个情况后,我告诉他们如何找到天坛,并且,我告诉了他们的路线,看到他们松下一口气后,我非常的高兴SeeingthemhaveasignofreliefIfeltverydelighted.ItoldthemthewaytogettotempleofheavenAsignofrelief由于我没有事情,我之后一直把他们带到了公交车站,他们对于我的这个行为非常的感谢TheythankedmegreatlyTheyappreciatedmegreatlyLedthemtothebusstop不一会,车来了,soonherecametheirbus.SawthemoffTheygetoffthebus我挥手给他们告别,他们的微笑让我的充满了成就感BeforeleavingIwavedtothemwithasmileonmyface.andasenseofhappinessfilledmyheart/SeeingthemgetonthebusIhadasenseofachievement.句式带动词汇看前面的文章的感受词,感情词WhatItIwhatsurprisedmemostwerehisWhatattractedmemostwereItwasafter20minutesthatwearrivedattheparkexitIAfterthatAfterdoingthat第三个,尽量写会写的我非常的感到高兴,希望多做几次这种事帮助他人,并且展示北京人的热情Howenthusiasticandpolitetheyare!itdawnedonmethattheymusthavebeenlost.ideasoccurredtomethattheymusthavebeenlostIguessthat一天,我陪我的老外朋友去公园,我们心情很好,然后我们打车去了,在路上,我们非常的欢声笑语,我的外国朋友还拍照,大概过了二十分钟,我们到了公园,我们都非常的开心突然,我的外国朋友想到他的照相机不见了,我突然想到我们肯定丢到出租车了Invoice因此我们就给出租车打电话,发票上所显示的电话不就,出租车司机就给我们camera来了,他的这一行为让我们非常的感动Callthetaxidriver今天,虽然事情很小,但是我感受到,人们互相帮助总是能让人有一种温暖之情,我希望自己以后也能够帮助他人,给别人带来欢乐、ataxi三.各档次的给分范围和要求第一档(18-20分)完全完成了试题规定的任务覆盖了所有内容要点,运用了多样的句式和丰富词汇,语法或用词方面有个别错误,但为尽量表达需要,很强的语言运用能力,有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,完全达到了预期的写作目的SaturdayJune2FineThismorning,IwasjoggingalongtheroadwhenIcameacrossaforeigncouplewithacitymap.Confusionwasclearontheirfacesandimmediatelyitdawnedonmethattheymusthavebeenlost.WithouthesitationIwalkeduptothemandofferedtohelp.Thankfully.myEnglishwasfluentenoughtomakemyselfunderstood.TheysmiledinreliefandsaidtheywantedtovisittheHeavenTemplebutfailedtolocateitinthemap.Quickly.IpointedItoutonthemapandshowedthemthedirectionaswell.Worriedbythethoughtthattheymightagaingetlostontheirway.IwalkedthemtoanearbybusstopsothattheycouldarrivetherewithouttroubleAfterawhilethebusNo.20pulledupatthestopwhichwouldtookthemtotheHeavenTemple.uponleaving.thecouplethankedmewarmlyagainexpressingtheirappreciationformykindhelp.SeeingtheNO.20Busdisappearingintothedistance,asenseofhappinessfilledmyheart.ItmakesmesodelightedandproudtoofferothersinneedahelpinghandandinthiscaseIamalsoabletoshowforeigners.howfriendlythecityofBeijingis.(19--20)点评内容完整,语言与句式丰富,有个别的错误.语言运用能力很强,很地道的英语语言表达SaturdayJune2ThismorningonmywaytothespatsotherIcameacrossacoupleofforeignerthemanholdingamaplookingfortheroutewithadoubtfulexpression.TohelpthemtofindawaytotheirdestinationIwalkedtowardsthemaskingthemwhethertheyneededhelptheynoddedwithsmile.Havingabriefconversation.IknewthattheywereplanningtovisittheTempleofHeavenbutlostthewaybecausetheytookthebusdriventotheoppositedirection.ThenItookthemtothebusstationandtoldthemtotaketheNO20busandtogetoffatthestopTiantanParktheyunderstoodquickly.Thebuscomewhenweweretalkingwarmlythecouplegotonthebussaying:ThankyouinpoorChineseIwavedtothemtogoodbye.IdidnotleaveuntilthebusdriveroutofmyviewThoughittookabouthalfanhourtohelpthemIstillconsidereditworthy.becausenotonlydidIimprovedmyspokenEnglishbutalsoIrepresentedchinaandlefttheforeigncouplesniceimpression.18点评完全完成了试题规定的任务,句式多样,词汇丰富,语法和用词有个别错误,但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致,语言运用能力强,内容连贯,结构紧凑第二档(15-17分)覆盖了内容要点,运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求,语法和用词方面基本准确,少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富句式所致,使用了简单的语句间连接成分,所写内容连贯达到了预期的写作目的SaturdayJune2fineThismorningonmywaytotheparkIfoundtwoforeignersstrugglingwiththeBeijingTouristMapandtheyevensaid:whatwasthemeanontheMapHearingthisIthoughttheymaycaughtbythe“languageproblem”.SoIdecidedtohelpthemwithouthesitantAftertalkingwiththemIknewthattheywantedtogotothe:”Tiantanpark”buttheydidnotknowhowtogetthere.Theylookedsad.AsagoodstudentIhonetheresponsibilitytohelpforeigners.SoIaskedthemtofollowmeandsaidthatIwouldgiveyouthebestridetotheTiantanpark.AfterawhileIleadedthemtothebusstationtellingthemtotaketheNumber.20bustogettheTiantanpark.FeelingdelightbymyhelptheadmiredweandthankedmealotWhenthebuscameItoldthemtogetonitBeforegettingonthebuswewavedhandstoeachotherandthereweretwobigsmileonourfaceInmyopinionasaseniorstudentspeciallyasaChineseweshouldalwayshelptheforeignersOnlyinthiswaycanweleaveagoodimpressioninforeigners’heart!点评完全完成了试题规定的任务,句式比较多样,词汇较为丰富,语法和用词有个别错误,但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致,语言运用能力较强,内容连贯,结构比较紧凑
(17)WhenIwasdownthestreetIsawtwoAmericanTouriststalkingwitheachotherinEnglishandIhearedtheyweretalkingabouttheroadtoHeavenTemple.TheyseemedgotlostSoIdecidedtohelpthem.ThenIintroducedmyselfandtoldthemwheretheHavenTempleis.AfterthatIledthemtoabusstationandtoldthemthatNO.20buscangetthere.AndwhentheywerewaitingforthebusIintroducedmorefunplacesinBeijingtothem.FinallythebuscameandtheygotonthebuswithsmilesandthankedmehappilyIfelthappyforhelpingthemtooIreallythinkhelppeopleisameaningfulthingandIwillabsolutelydoitinmywholelife.点评完全完成试题规定的任务,覆盖了所有内容要求,句式与词汇的使用能够满足任务要求,语法用词有少许错误
(15)第三档(12-14分)基本完成了试题规定的任务覆盖了内容要点,运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求,语法和用词方面有一些错误,但不影响理解基本达到了预期的写作目的ThismorningIwasheadingschoolsuddenly2westernpeoplecaughtmyeyes.Theywereacouple.Bothofthemfixedtheireyesonamapwithapuzzledlookontheirfaces.GuessingtheymaymeetwithsometroublesIautomaticalywalkedclosethem.askingiftheyneedhelp.ThewifetoldmethattheyfindthewaytotheTempleofHeavenAfteraconsideration.Iadvisedthemtotakeabus.ItwasthebusNO.20thatownsastopnamed“theTempleofHeaven”Ididn’tleaveuntilthebuscame.wavinggood-byeTheythankedmeagainandagain.Thisexperienceisstillvividinmymindthoughmyeffortsweresmall.Theydidmakeourplanetawarmerplacetolive.14点评基本完成了规定的任务,覆盖了内容要点;语法和用词方面有一些错误,但不影响理解ThismorningonmywaytoschoolIsawamanwasaskingaladyhowtogettheTiantanParkwithamapinhishandsbuttheladydidn’tknowwhathesaid.IwenttothemandtoldthemthewaytoTiantanparkpatient.AfterawhilewecametothebusstationandItoldthemthebusofthe20thcouldarrivedTiantanParkwhenthebuscame.IaskedthemgotonthebusandIalsosaid“goodbye”tothem.Ithinkthisexperienceisverymeaningfulforme.ThroughthisexperienceIcannotonlyhelpothersbutalsoimprovemyforeignlanguage’sskill.Iwilltrymybesttohelpmoreandmorepeople.点评基本完成了规定的任务,覆盖了内容要点;语法和用词方面有一些错误,但不影响理解
(13)ThismorningIwenttothebookstoreonmywayhomeIsawacoupleofpeoplestandontheroad.TheytookamapandspokeinEnglish.Ithinktheyfacesomedifficulties.IwenttothemtotheTiantanparkbuttheydidn’tknowwhereitis.Itoldthemthattheyshouldtakethebus20arrivethere.IshowedthemtothebusstationandtoldthemwheretheyshouldgetoffwhenthebuscometothestationtheyexpressedtherethanksformeandIwavedthehandtothem.Ihopetheyhaveagoodtimeinthepark.12点评要点全,内容完整,完成规定任务,个别语法,用词及表达有错误,但不影响理解第四档(6-11分)未恰当完成试题规定的任务,漏掉或未描述清楚要点内容,所用的句式和词汇有限,语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解,未能清楚的传达信息OnedayIwaswalkinginthestreet.Thereweretwoforiengnerswhocan’tfindtheirway.ThenIaskedwheretheywantedtogoandhelpthemhowtogettotheirdestination.TheywantedtoTIanTanPark.soIsuggestedthemtotakeabus.BecauseBeijing’sbussystemisreallyconvince.NotonlydidIpointedthewaybutalsodidItookthemtothebusstation.LookingthemgotonthebushappilyIwasreallyhappy.TiredasIwasbutthesenseofachievementcameupfromthebottomofmyheart!11点评未恰当的完成规定任务,未描述清楚内容要点;语法和用词错误影响了对内容的理解ThismorningIwalkedalongthestreettovisitedmyfriend.ThenInoticedtwooldforignerswerelookingtheBeijingTouristMapwithpuzzledwhenIpassedthem.It’sseemsthattheywerelosttheirway.ItalkedwiththemwhethertheyneedhelpandtheoldwomantoldmetheywantedtovisitedTiantanpark.Pointingatthemaptheoldmanaskedmehowtogetthere.Ilookedaroundandfoundthereisabusstationnotfarfromus.Iwalkedtothebusstationwiththeforeignersfollowed.ArrivingatthestationItoldthemthatthebus20cangotTiantanparkeasily.Minuteslaterthebus20stopedandtheygotoffthebuswavingforthemIwishedtheywouldhaveahappytravelinChina.10点评未恰当完成规定的任务,未描述清楚内容要点;所用的词汇和句式有限;语法和用词错误影响了对内容的理解(gotoff)ThismorningIsawtwoforigerstheywasfindingthewaywiththemap.Theylookedpuzzling.ThenIaskthemwherearetheywanttogo.ThewomantellmetheywanttogotoTianTan.Ihelpedthemfindthebus.WhentheytookthebusIfeelhappy.Becausecanhelpothers.InthefutureIwillhelpalotofpeopleIwanttobeaLeiFeng.点评要点基本覆盖,但所用句式和词汇有限,语法和用词错去影响了对所写内容的理解
(8)IamLiHuaIamastudents.Istudyinclass1grade3fromHongxinghighschool.Thismorning.WhenIwalkedontheroadIsawaforgiersfamily.TheyfoundthewaybyBeijingTouristMap.buttheycouldn’tunderstandtheway.Irembermyteachersoftentellusweshouldhelpthepeoplewhohasdifficult.SoIwenttotheforgierstoaskthemiftheyneedshelp.TheytoldmewhathappenedIhelpedthemfoundtheplaceontheBeijingTouristmap.ButbecausetheyarecomefromothercountrysIdecidedtotookthemtotheplacewheretheywanttogo.IintroducesomehistoryofBeijingwhenwewenttothebusstation.ArriverthebusstationItoldthemwhichbustheycantake.Theyweresohappy.WhenthebusiscomingIsawthemtakethebus.ThenIlefttheyweresohappy.Ithinkweshouldrememberwhattheteacherssayandhelpthepeoplewhohasdifficult.Itcanlettheworldbecomemorebeautiful.Andletpeoplewhohasthedifficultthinkpeopleisfriendly.点评要点表述不清,篇幅虽长,但所用的句式和词汇严重的影响了对所写内容的理解,语法错误频繁出现明显的词不达意
(7)第五档(1-5)未完成试题规定的任务,明显遗漏要点内容,所用句式和词汇贫乏,严重影响了对所写内容的理解,词不达意完全不能清楚的表达信息WhenIonthewaytomyfriend’shomeIfoundtwoelderpeopleatthestreetlookingtheBeijingtouristmapIfoundtheyhadsometroublesoIwalkedtothem.BysomesimpleconversationIknowtheywouldgotothetempleofhelven.ThenIletthemtothebusstationandremindedthemtogetNo.20busatthetempleofhelvenstop.Withmyhelptheolderpeoplegettherightbustovisitthetempleofhelven.AttheendofthearriviteIfoundhelpingtosolveisanhappythingitcanimproveourconversationability.Andhelpsomepeoplecanmaketheworldmoreandmorebeautiful.5点评缺少告别的要点,运用的句式和词汇有限,语法和用词方面的错误影响了对整个文章内容的理解.通过以上对评分细则的解读也许各位老师内心多少有点触动或感悟.注意点内容要点完整性的定义就是每个要点要配合至少有一个细节支撑才能称之为完整的要点,细节为要点服务,细节未描述清楚或句子写错都可被视为要点不完整我想这个真的很重要,有的同学认为要点都写了,可是分不高,那我想和我说的这个注意就很有关系了所以要想得高分作文最重要的一条要点要全内容充实其次是要把句子写对,有细节的支撑.做到这些作文肯定能到12分-14分左右即第三档.如果再有出彩的句子和地道的表达并增加对每副图片细节合理的描写就会跳到第二档即15-17分.关于词汇的使用的问题,第一拼写的正确性,出现了很多动词过去式和过去分词的错误,这个各位老师一定要重视,这个很重要,因为我觉得某种程度上它决定了句子的正确性进而影响作文的档次希望各位老师查查孩子的过去式和过去分词举例()第二TheRightWordattheRightTime;Usingtherightwordattherighttimeisratherlikewearingappropriateclothingfortheoccasion所谓选词用词原则就是指选择和使用最适合具体语境、最能向读者传递作者真实思想的词语另外对于教重点班的老师来说,这个显得尤为重要大词的使用问题需要和老师们探讨词汇使用的恰当性,有的作文写得很好,句式也不错,可是读起来就是有点别扭,原因是使用了我们所说的大词,看起来这个同学词汇量很大,可是用在这里并一定很顺畅和地道,反而画蛇添足了有一篇专家组就给了14分,解释就是拽词了我刚才提到了,要点全内容充实是得高分的首要.写对句子是保障.做到要点全行文流畅句子对至少在12分左右也有可能得到更高的分数,哪怕都是简单句,至少能保证在及格线以上.确切地说能得到12-14分,这对于阅卷人来说,是比较安全的一个评分点但真正的阅卷过程中阅卷老师首先注意的还是语言.所以我们在平时的教学中从简单的五种句型抓起强化练习保证70%以上的同学能把句子写对写出符合五种基本句型的句子将是我们备考最有效的过程之一.所以在开始时对刚上高三的学生而言我认为先不要忙着写完整的情景作文我们先从简单句入手反复翻译或仿写,彻底消灭低级错误能把简单句都能写全对的同学说实在的一个班也找不了多少.在这个基础上再使用复合句.整理加工能够让作文出彩的句型或高级词汇不需要很多多了记不住.我想全区优秀学生毕竟是少数,大部分同学都处于中等水平,所以对于大多数学生而言,作文出彩用不了几招比如so---thatIfinditimportant/hardtodosomething;Hehasmaderapidprogresswhichmakes---.正确使用简单的定语从句非谓语做定语或状语等反复练,能学会几招就够了,因为作文中,有一两处出彩的地方就可以了还有几个小问题,开头已给出,不超也不扣分;拼音拼写天坛两字可以接受出现汉字不可接受,应该是零分;整个作文的时态不是主要,关键是内容和语言质量.;出现对话体不是主要因素,关键也是在内容和语言本身;没用黑色签字笔的一律标记提交大组长处理,估计按零分处理Itbeingasunnydaywithagentlebreezemyfatherdroveacartakingmetoxiaoming’shouse.onthewaytheretalkingandlaughingweweredelightedtoseemanybeautifulviewsaroundus.After30minuteswearrivedathishouse.themomentwesteppedintohishousewefoundxiaomingwasworkingonhisfieldwhilehisgrandmawasdirectinghim.itwasveryhardformetoimaginethataboyofmyagecouldhaveshoulderedsucharesponsibilityofsupportinghisfamilytheboywhoseageisthesameasmeOnseeinghimIcalledxiaomingandherecognizedmeimmediately.Thenheshowedustohim.whatIbroughtforhimweresomepresentssuchasabagnotebooksandothertools.thankfullyxiaomingandhisgrandmaappreciatedmykindness.Whatattractedusmostweretheawardshereceivedinhisschool.onthewallhangallkindsofhisrewardsdemonstratinghiseffortsweatanddetermination.seeingallofthisIfeltasignofreliefanddeterminedtolearnfromhim.Howtimeflies!itwassoonthatweputourvisittoanend.beforeleavingtheywentoutsidetoseeusoffwavingtousuntilourcardisappeared.ShortthoughthevisitwasIfeltexcitedandproudfornotonlycanweofferahelpinghandtotheneedypersonbutwecanshowhimhowwarmoursocietyis平时合理利用时间上自习的时间看文综,背诵,写作业英语完型,单选,一个c一个d篇作文Whatleftadeepimpressionweretheactivitiesasfollows.beingabsorbed。