《考前技能篇8》读后续写作的解题技巧

【考前技能篇8】读后续写作的解题技巧读后续写的命题形式为提供一段350词左右的与语言材料，据该材料内容、所给两段段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节合理、完整的短文.创造性即发挥想象力，该题型具有一定的开放性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造；.逻辑性即根据已提供的关键信息，按照可能的合理的方向续写，使文章逻辑结构完整；.丰富性即语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满

一、考情分析

1.历年真题一览表groundjustforus.注意.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorsewhichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolitbutinvain.FrightenedasIwasItriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.FortunatelyminuteslaterthehorsestoppedbeforeariveroutofbreathandsodidI.Atthatmomentmydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOKhewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidntknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperationweheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.ItmustbeUnclePaul/Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.FinallyUnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride![2017年11月浙江卷]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事AvacationwithmymotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusementsallbecauseofmymother-lovingsweetandyetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakotaandmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.AsthefirstdayofourtripapproachedDavidmyeight-year-oldbrotherandIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.WhoknewifwedeverseethemagainFinallythemomentofourdeparturearrivedandweloadedsuitcasesbooksgamescampingequipmentandatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.WcbravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwedreturnedhometogetthepurseandtravelerschecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgoandIllstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:Honeywherearethekids”What!OhGosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecitybutwewerentabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnightwehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.AfterdrivinginvainforsometimeMomsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidntwefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthereDavidandIbecamenervous.ToourgreatreliefDadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections（反对）.IfastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstepsMomwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Wedecidedtocampalongtheriver.Theviewsthereweresurprisinglybeautiful-thewarmsunshinethefreshairthecleanwater.Wesatonthegrassenjoyingthesplendidnature.HoweverwhenDadwasabouttoputupourtenthewasdisappointedtofindthatithadbeenleftinthehotel.WellDadhadtogobacktofetchittocontinueourcamping.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.EverytimewegottoanewplaceMomwouldcheeruplikeachild.Shewouldgetoffthecarexcitedlylaughinganddancingaround.Togetherweenjoyedthemodernsightsinthebigcitiesthehistoricalbuildingsinthesmalltownsandtheamazingsceneryinnature.WhenwecamebacktothehotelafterthetiringbutexcellentvisitMomwouldhugusandkissusonourfaces.Howsweetshewas!Absent-mindedandforgetfulasshewassheneverforgottoexpressherlovetous.[2017年6月浙江卷]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事OnabrightwarmJulyafternoonMacHollanaprimaryschoolteacherwascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.OneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepairbuttheyhadencouragedMactocarryonandtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）alongalonehethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Manthafsabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtothesidehesawinstantlythatitwasntadogatallbutawolfquicklycatchingupwithhim.Macsheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebarshefiredthesprayatthewolf.AbrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimalandtoMacsreliefitfellbackshakingitshead.Butaminutelateritwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMacsbiketearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtimeandagainitfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehillhedbeeasycaughtupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.AtthismomentPaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidntthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlatertheyspottedwhattheytooassumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotclosertheyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfastjustadozenyardsawaynow.注意.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslatertheothertwocyclistsarrived.Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:ThecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhimPaulandBeckygotoutofthecarimmediatelytogivehelp.Butwiththebarehandstheydidntdaretofightwiththewolf.Howevertheystillapproachedtothewolfbravely.AtthesametimethewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadbackshoutingloudlyatPaulandBecky.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycleandwasreadytofightagainstthewolf.Thatreacheddeadlock.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslatertheothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituationwherethreemencircledthewolf.Macsfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecarsandsometookoutthekniveseventhegunstowardsthewolf.Justatthattimethewolfmightfeelthethreatsfromthepeoplestartingtowithdraw.Soonitranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.[2016年10月浙江卷]OneweekendinJulyJaneandherhusbandTomhaddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunatelyonthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquairel.BythetimetheyreachedthelakeJanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.Tmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.WithnopathtofollowJanejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplacesheturnedaroundhopingtoseethelake.Tohersurpriseshesawnothingbutforestandfarbeyondasnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmovingbutthefarthershewalkedthemoreconfusedshebecame.AsnightwasbeginningtofallJanewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.LyingawakeinthedarkJanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofdayhungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatioyshealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.FeelingstrongernowJanebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.AsshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestreamJaneheardahelicopter.IsthatformeUnfortunatelythetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslateranotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryallowblousethinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Althoughshefeltalittlesadshedidntgetfearful.ShethoughtaboutTom.Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.ShefellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestreamhopingtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Fortunatelyshesawahugeflatrockinanopenareaatadistance.Sherushedtotherockclimbedontoitandwaited.Tohergreatjoythehelicopterappearedagain.Theneareritgotthemoresheflaggedtheyellowblouse.LuckilythehelicopterdidntmissJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrantowardsJane.Shebrokedownandburstintotears.［实验省份考试说明样题］AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBankheheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldntgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.ArthurstoppedandaskedItlookslikeyouvegotaproblemJArthursaid.Imafraidso.IminabighurryandIcantstartmycar.”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelpArthurasked.TheyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaidThanks.Ifyouresureitwouldntbetoomuchtroubleyoucouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.Tdbegladtohelp.Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitonthegroundheturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalkingheheardthelongloudnoiseofanalaim.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery（抢劫）!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.PeopleaskedeachotherWhathappened”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthurstillcarryingthesuitcaseturnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.Whyisshelookingatmelikethat”Hethought.uThesuitcase!Shethinks19mthebankthief!Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightenedandwithoutanotherthoughthestartedtorun.注意.所续写短文的词数应为15左右；.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1AshewasrunningArthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind“Stopstop!”Paragraph2ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur...Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1AshewasrunningArthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind“Stopstop!”ButArthurranevenfaster.Justthenataxicamealong.ArthurstoppeditandthrewhimselfintothebackscatandaskedthedrivertogotothePoliceStation.Paragraph2ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurranintoitshouting“TheresabankrobberyandIknowthebankthief.QuicklyafterArthurtoldhisstorythepolicemenstartedfbrthebankwithoutdelay.Whentheyarrivedatthespottheyweresurprisedtofindthatthepeoplewhogatheredbeforethebankwerenowcrowdingaroundtheyoungmanwhoseemedquiteworried.FinallyArthurrealizedthathehadmadeamistake.Theloudnoiseofthealarmwasincorrectlymadebythebankssystemandnothinghappenedtothebankbuttheyoungmanwasworriedthatsomeonehadrobbedhissuitcase.从上面表格中我们能够看出，读后续写通常是记叙文为主，所考察的主题为人与自然，人与动物或者人与自我这要求，我们在复习备考时，需要有针对地复习和训练

2.读后续写的评分标准.本题总分为25分，按七个档次进行评分.评分时，主要从内容、语言表达和篇章结构三个方面考查，具体为

（1）续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度

（2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性

（3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性3•评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分

4.评分时还应注意

（1）词数少于120的，酌情扣分；

（2）单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受；

（3）书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分b.评分档次c.・评分解读总体来看，读后续写以读为辅，以写为主，其目标是考查学生的综合语言运用能力评分标准是评分的依据和绝对标准依据评分标准，读后续写主要考查阅读理解能力，由读到写的思维能力和语言表达运用能力三个方面评卷时，评卷老师先根据考生所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分阅卷老师在阅卷时，主要考虑以下内容.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；.内容的丰富性；.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；.上下文的连贯性

二、七大黄金原则读后续写诗阅读和写作相结合的考查形式，旨在考察学生的综合运用能力续写思路和以往的高考英语命题作文不同，读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅要读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络和关系续写这篇短文时，考生需要明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置变化、人物情感等在此基础上，考生顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来针对读后续写的题型特点，我们可以按照以下的方式进行备考L不增加人物由考纲样题及近5年高考真题中所给的段落首句可知，续写的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物所推进因此，强行增加人物有可能会偏离情节发展不增加旁支情节题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写］旨在延续原材料的故事情节，并不是要发展新情节.不用过多对话在续写中展示对话虽能丰富内容和语言，增强语篇的连贯性，但使用过多的对话会显得篇幅累赘且很难在限定的词数里把整个后续的情节发展补充完整.不用负能量结局结局设计绝对不能负能量内容应该积极向上，能增长知识或传播正能量如样题的结尾，我们可以有两种设定:这个年轻人就是银行抢劫者，而Arthur因此成为一个大英雄；或者Arthur误会了这个年轻人是银行抢劫犯，但最终警察们还是表扬了他见义勇为的行为.不在文末设置悬念题目要求是“使之构成一篇完整的短文”，若在文末设置悬念，就会给人一种还没结束的感觉，这样的故事是不完整的6•不偏离原文主题续写的情节应时刻围绕着短文的主题去推进，如上面的样题，由续写第二段首句提到的“警察局”可推测，我们可以围绕勇气及正义的主题去进行续写

7.不违背逻辑常理情节和细节的想象要合理，符合生活常识及具有逻辑性

三、能力培养策略.精读策略读后续写，顾名思义，先读后写，所以读懂原文很重要那么，读原文需要注意以下两点？首先，读故事情节，明确故事发展方向读后续写始于阅读，根据评分标准，续写内容需要有完整性，那么，内容要点要全是续写的基本要求具体的续写要点包括，情节是否连贯和完整，情绪和情感是否到位，主旨表达是否明确等这就要求学生首先精读原文，把握故事的主要情节，根据两段开头语，进行初步的情节预测其次，读人物个性和情感细节，把握人物特征除了了解情节主线以外，原文中的细节也是非常重要的其中，原文中人物的刻画能有效地帮助我们把握主要人物的情感和性格特征学生读懂核心人物在情节发展过程中各种心理或情感的变化，以此推出人物的性格特征只有准确地把握故事发展脉络和人物的个性特征，才能确保后续故事发展方向的准确性，以确保续写内容和原文有高度的融洽度.构思策略构思续写环节主要从以下两个方面来构思根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路结合段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章划线词语提示，确定续写段落的内容紧扣段落开头语提示信息读后续写重在内容，考生所构思的内容是否合情合理，是否前后连贯直接关系到得分的高低所以在读懂全文情节和人物性格的基础上，还需要读懂两段落的开头语通常开头语把续写内容限定在一定的范围内，规定了续写的情节发展走向考生不可天马行空，肆意发挥合理拓展情节拓展情节包括故事的主要情节设计，与段落开头语和原文的衔接程度，段落中句子与句子的前后逻辑和衔接以及情绪或情感细节的融洽程度等等学生在构思情节时，这些要素都要充分考虑到不然很容易写“走题”3・习作策略读后续写时一个复杂的语言学习，模仿和运用的积极构建过程因此，必须要努力在续写中延续作者的语言表达特色在形成初稿后，有必要对原文进行毁读，进一步感知作者对语言特色，并对初稿进行精雕细琢行文习作时需要注意以下几点扩大阅读量续写短文多以个人故事，人物介绍，短片小说，童话，剧本等为主，在平时多训练中学生应该大量读相关原著或者文章，培养语感的同时，可以积累相关素材、以供平时训练时放写，从而达到在考试时根据内容创造性的构思，达到创写的目的在考试时，也可以吧原文的关键表达画出来，续写时，可以临时仿写相关句子，以达到和原文的行文一致保持与原文的行文风格因为词汇和句式需要和原文高度一致，学生在平时的训练中有必要进行针对性的训练仿写原文句式或者词汇是很有必要的在考试中，原文的关键反应人物性格特点的词汇和句式都要习惯地画出来，在续写时需要写到相关人物的时候可以模仿写作这样写出来的文章可以有效地和原文相一致拟写草稿，修改错词病句仔细检查词汇，句式表达，是否有拼写错误，搭配错误或者表达不够准确读后续写要求学生掌握一定的精准表达词汇和句式，那么，在平时的训练中，学生需要把相关表达进行分类记忆，词汇或者短语在什么场合才能使用，都需要了解清楚这样在写作文的时候，可以准确地了解不同的场景下，苏选用的词汇也是不一样的学生在注重词汇和句式的高端的同时，还需要仔细检查，所使用的语言是否有误切不可违了追求高级，而忽略了使用场景重视书写写作不是客观题，它是老师主管评判分数的题型所以书写很重要如果一篇文章字迹潦草，书写不规范，那么一定会给阅卷老师留下不好的印象，第一感觉不好的话，语言句式再高级，老师也不一定能第一眼看见这样不仅得不到高分，连最基本的分数都不一定得到所以学生在平时进行书写训练时很有必要的

四、写作流程读一编一造第1步读出原故事的六要素（相当于抓住原故事的主题和重点）操作步骤

（1）边读边想象场景，在大脑中构造画面、拍电影

（2）边读边用中文把主要情节写下来（可以避免反复看原文而浪费时间）

（3）主要情节即“记叙文六要素”人物、时间、地点、起因、经过、结果（谁在什么时间、什么地方，因为什么、做了什么、最终怎样）第二步编依据原文中的六要素，用中文编新故事原则时间/地点/人物不变，起因/经过/结果顺承）操作步骤

（1）编情节根据两段的首句，猜测故事发展的脉络（可用正负法，结局一定是正向的，符合社会主义价值观；如果有标题，最后一定要点题）

（2）编细节为续写的两个自然段各想4-5句话（用中文记下4-5个要点）第三步造翻译造句

三、真题及样题[2020年7月，浙江高考]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事OnefallmywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld^-thetownofChurchillinManitobaCanada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimals-shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenTmfacetofacewithapolarbearIlikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimesthatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinnerayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffedandsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcampwhichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.TerrifiedElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebearhitpotshardandfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitswaybutitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇）Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldntlastthrough30moreminutesofthebearspunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears*eyesbutdoesnthurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyandthroughthefencesprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（U孔叫），thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:L所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:Afewminuteslaterthebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Paragraph:Atthatverymomentthehelicopterarrived.【解析】本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事主人公的感情线变化为兴奋渴望一惊恐一放松剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开由第一段的段首提示句可知几分钟后，熊又回到营地接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面，例如“Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.”这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应，也描绘出让人战栗的场景由第二段的段首提示句可知此时，直升机到了如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingtheareathebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”最后，结尾部分需要迅速收束，并说明成功逃脱的结局关于画线词Elli作为女主人公，是续写内容中应该出现的画线词，noisespicturesfencespray与熊有关，也在两段续写内容中出现最终，两人回归安全状态，因此画线词safe也可自然而然地出现在续写内容中由此划分画线词，可迅速锁定需使用的画线词范围，辅助构思【范文】Afewminuteslaterthebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.ThenoisesturnedElliandIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.Heroaredrepeatedlyshatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepicturesofthebear.Theanimalsnoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogethershiveringwithfear.Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingtheareahetrottedforwardafewsteps.Atthatverymomentthehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhungersowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.AswewereclimbingtheropeladderElliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.[2020年，新高考全国I卷，山东]阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindeclinesomepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblemsandtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtimeshewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbedhiswifewhotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttoworkandtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim“shesaidtoherownchildrenJohnHarryandClara.Heissuchahelptohismother.HewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoneybutIdon*tseewhathecando.”AftertheirmotherlefttheroomthechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.UIwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney“saidClara.Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^“SodoIJsaidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^ForsomemomentsJohnsaidnothingbutsuddenlyhesprangtohisfeetandcried“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanideaitwassuretobeagoodone.Itellyouwhatwecando“saidJohn.YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentusWellwecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbagsandBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意.续写词数应为150左右.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsideashethoughtitwasagoodonetoo.WitheverythingreadyBernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.【答案】WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsideashethoughtitwasagoodonetoo.Sotheywenttothelocalsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcornandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.Whentheygothometheymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.WiththepopcorntheywenttoBernardshome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswereverygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.WitheverythingreadyBernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaroundtothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Thenhewantedtobeself-dependent.ThereforeheaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthatnotonlydidhesellpopcornbuthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittastebetter.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredithsfamilyandhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事1认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意-制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花2根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理.根据第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsideashethoughtitwasagoodonetoo.（当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意）可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句WitheverythingreadyBernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.（一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意）可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思5续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致文章时态以一般过去时为主应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯[2020年1月，浙江高考]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事“PmgoingtomissyousomuchPoppysaidthetallthinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestooduphuggedhisparentsandsmiledtryingnottolethisemotions（情绪）getthebetterofhim.Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.Thefamilyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulderandflashedabrightsmile9Iguessthisisithesaid.Filseeyoubackhomeinamonthokay”Hisparentsnoddedandtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowdsofhundredsofstudentsandparents.TheboysmotherturnedtothedogOkayPoppytimetogobackhome.”Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.AllthatweekPoppydidntseeminterestedinherdinnerherfavoritetoyoreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoobuttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebacktovisit.Poppydidnt.Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofabuttheoldgirljustwasntherusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried.WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyupHaskedDad.Wevetriedeverything.“IhaveanideabutitmightbealittlecrazysmiledWithoutanybodyleftinthehousebutusthisplacecoulduseabitoffun.Let*sgetalittledogforPoppy.nItdidnttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhomeasusualbutwhenshesawtheboxshestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging（摆动）eversoslowlythenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.注意.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Para

1.Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Para

2.Afewweekslatertheboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.【答案】Para

1.Dadputtheboxonthegroundandopenedthetop.Ashinylittlewetnosepoppedup.Thentwofluffypaws.Nexttheboxtippedoversidewaysandouttumbledamassofwigglygoldensilliness.Poppywasamazed.Shewaggedfuriously.Shebarkedwithjoy.Shesmiledhertonguelollingoutassheinvestigatedthesuiprise.Thelittlepupwasnotshyandimmediatelystartingyippingandjumpingaroundtheolderdog.Thatdidnttakelong“remarkedMomasbothdogswentroaringaroundthehouseinanimpromptugameofchase.Dadlaughed.Para

2.Afewweekslatertheboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.HehadmissedPoppyandwaslookingforwardtoseeingher.Whenhebentdowntogiveherabighughefelloverinsurpriseasasmallgoldencloudcameracinguptolickhisfacetoo.“Ohmygoshwhoisthis”heexclaimed.Hisparentslaughedatthelookofshockonhisface.“ThatsPee-wee/9saidDad.Icantbelieveyougotyourselvesapuppy!”“WedidntrepliedMom.ThispuppyisfbrPoppy!”【解析】这是一篇读后续写作文通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Poppy道别而没有了男孩在家里，Poppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语按要求完成写作任务[2018年6月浙江卷]阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事Itwassummerandmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerqueabigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaulmydadsfriendpickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.VeryearlyinthemorningUnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.ThedaystartsatdawnonmyfhrmJhesaid.AfterbreakfastIwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickenswhilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze（吃草）.IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.IntheafternoonIaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorserideandhesaidyesaslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasntgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.SomydadandIputonournewcowboyhatsgotonourhorsesandheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Dontbelateforsupper”UnclePaulcriedandkeeptothetracksothatyoudontgetlost!”OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocksthedeepgreenpinetreesandthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven（编织的）blanketspreadoutuponthe体裁原文字数话题2021年新高考全国I卷记叙文306母亲节的礼物浙江卷6月记叙文315暑假打工薪水浙江卷1月记叙文348万圣节南瓜趣事2020年全新高考全国I卷记叙文325帮助弱者脱困浙江卷7月记叙文330与熊对抗脱险浙江卷1月记叙文350抚慰狗狗心伤2018浙江卷6月记叙文325度假骑马迷路2017浙江卷6月记叙文348骑行途中偶遇狼浙江卷11月记叙文343健忘妈妈趣事2016浙江卷10月记叙文335吵架出走迷路档次得分评分标准第七档22-25—创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续与完整，与原文情境融洽度局—使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解—自然有效地使用了段落间、句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯第六档18-21—创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较局—使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解—比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯第五档15-17—创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关—使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但基本不影响理解—使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯第四档11-14—创造了基本完整的故事内容，但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关—使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误和不恰当之处，个别部分影响理解—尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯第三档6-10—内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有一定程度脱节—所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解—未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯第二档1-5—内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续与不完整，与原文情境基本脱节—所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解—几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯第一档0—未作答:所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判:所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。